When the story "Rendezvous" ends the main characters Kim and Payton are about to meet at a rest stop. The story has an open ending so now you are to continue the story - what happens next? Your ending must be a minimum of 300 words.
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Kim gets into the car, first there is very quiet in the car, and she does not really know what to think. Payton looks right over to her sometimes. He takes a sip of his bud. Kim asks Payton about where he's going. Payton mumbles a bit, Kim cannot really understand what he says. Kim becomes more and more nervous, she starts thinking of home. She begins to regret that she left. She thinks of her mother's homemade cooking and her lovely warm bed.
SvarSletPayton looks a little over at her again, he thinks about what he should do with her, he is considering what options he has with her. First, he'll just want du drive to a quiet place away and kill her. Nobody will think that she is missing. Kim asks in to Payton again. Payton answer back this time and he ask Kim if she would have a bud. Kim says no thanks. But she asks Payton “do you want to buy some food for my”, she is getting hungry.
Payton drive into the gas station and buy a sandwich and a pack of buds. Payton looks on a map hanging on the gas station. He's looking for a good place to leave her. He finds a place. It will take an hour to drive to this place.
They begin to drive and they talk back and forth, the music is turned down. Payton begins to paper himself, he screws up for the music again. But then he begins to think about what the priest had told him. He stops by the roadside. He looks out in the rain, Payton looks over to Kim. "Go out of the car!" Kim did not understand what is happening. Payton says there again. Kim hurries out of the car. Payton drives away at full speed. Kim looks up.
By Troels
She opened the car door, and the vey second she entered, she got a bad felling from this man. She began to talk as she always did when she got nervous. She told him why she had run away from home to prove her parents a point. She might only be 15 but she can take care of herself, and does not need them to interfere all the time. She took a glimpse of the Budweiser. Payton saw this and reached out, to the back to get one for her. “My name is Payton”, he said and with one hand he opened the can and gave it to her. She has tasted beer before but never really liked the taste of it. She drank it anyway, and felt that her first impression of this man might have been wrong. They drove along the interstate for a while, and talked about all and nothing at the same time. Her stomach was making very loud noises. Payton was rubbing his left arm and tried to behave him self, tried to calm the snake down, you will be fed and you won’t have to wait very long. “What is wrong with your arm?” Kim asks. Payton ignores her question. Kim is getting a bit drunk from the beer, as it is almost empty. “I have to get something to eat”, Payton looks over at Kim “Kim I will stop at the next gas station, so you can get something to eat.” That was the last thing Kim heard.
SvarSletPayton then takes a right turn, he can see some dimmer lights in the distance. He drives towards them. When he gets closer to the lights, he turns the light off on his car and drives slowly up to the trailer park, luckily for him it is completely dark.
He takes Kim’s body out of the car and into his bed, where he does what he usually do to the girls he brings home.
The next day the Police rang Kim’s parents and told them, that they have found Kim. She was badly hurt and was at the moment at the hospital, where the doctors were taking care of her injuries. “She will be fine”, the police said.
RIkke
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SvarSletAs Kim opened the door she was almost knocked off her feet by the sheer volume of the music. The man on the driver’s seat smiled at her. “Want a ride?” he asked. “Sure” she smiled and was about to sit down on the other front seat, with her bag between her feet, when the man suddenly held up his hands to stop her. “Why don’t you toss onto the back seat?” he asked. “Then you’ll have more room for your legs. I know from personal experience that having too little leg room on a longer journey can get really uncomfortable”. “Of course, I’ll just do that”, Kim answered. She stepped back and reached for the other door, when the man once again interrupted. “You could, of course, also place your bag in the trunk”, he suggested. “I don’t know what you’ve got in the bag, but if it’s fragile or valuable, I’d personally place it there, since it’s less prone to vibrations in the trunk than on the back seat.
SvarSletShe hesitated for a moment. It was a difficult choice that she suddenly and unexpectedly had to make. “I’m so unsure of where I should choose to place it”, she admitted. “What do you think? I only have a bottle of water and a couple of granola bars, so vibrations aren’t my primary concern”. The man ran his fingers through his long hair and was silent for a while. He began to realise how difficult a situation he had placed the girl in. Finally he said “I think you should place it on the back seat. In that way you can reach it faster and more easily when leaving car. Of course, I have absolutely no right to tell you what to do, but I believe it this would be the most optimal solution”.
Kim was like paralysed for a moment. She then slowly nodded and carefully placed her bag on the back seat. After having closed the door she sat down on the front seat and fastened her seatbelt. The journey home could begin.
Nils
The man driving the car looks kind of creepy with his greasy hair and uncut beard. The car stinks of beer and empty Budweiser cans lies in the bottom. The driver looks, with his black eyes on Kim and blows smoke in the face of her. Kim coughs and feels her eyes sting. She wonders why she got into the car in the first place.
SvarSletThen the creepy driver asks Kim "Where are you going little one?" Kim feels the chills running down on her back, the man's voice was deep and his teeth were yellow and ugly. "I'm supposed to go home on Arlington road near Boston" Kim answers. To her surprise the driver sits with a stone face and smiles all over it. Kim starts to regret her hitchhike more and more as time passes and the speed of the car is increasing.
"What is your name?" Kim asks but gets no answer. Kim is not pleased with the driving; she thinks it's reckless to drive 94 mph on the interstate with only one arm. The weird scary driver keeps squeezing his left arm and looks down when he does so. The music sounds awful. It's a loud banging drum that just keeps on going in the same beat minute after minute. Kim decides to try again and asks the driver about his name.
This time he looks at her, and says "What does it matter?" Kim doesn't understand and in a blink of an eye the driver hits her on the throat. Kim feels enormous pain and can't breathe, she grasps to the neck. But at the same time the driver reaches over and opens the door. Everything goes fast and with a lot of noise and wind the driver kicks Kim out the door.
Kim could see an older man with long dirty hair smiling at her inside the car. “Get in” he says with a kindly voice. Kim has the feeling that something is wrong, but she ignores it, because she is cold and soaked. The driver introduces himself as Payton and asks her “where are you going”. Kim tells him that she only wants a short ride to the next interstate rest stop. She is scared of him because he looks at her with hungry eyes while he rubs his arm. He says to her “I cannot stop again already; you have to wait until my Firebird needs some gasoline” Kim argues against it, but no matter what she says the ugly man drive faster and faster. Now the noise from the tape deck is unbearably and she trembles with fear. Suddenly a police car which has the sirens on is coming and flag down the car. Payton speeds up but the police are driving faster so he gives up getting away and stops the car. In the same second the car stops Kim jumps out of the car and tries to escape but a policeman catches her. Another policeman has already handcuffed the ugly man and Kim could hear that they arrest him because of the high speed and his smell of beer. Kim shakes all over her body, cries and tells the policeman that she misses her parents and wants to go home. She goes into the police car and she feels safety. Through the window she could see that the police examine the car and finds a big knife and a revolver. Joan
SvarSletAs the car door opens, she is hit by a stench of beer. She stops and thinks a second. Maybe it isn’t so smart getting the car with this stranger. It rains even harder now, all she wants is a little warmth, so she gets in the car. The car is untidy, she looks over at the driver and says hi, he smiles and asks her where she is going. “Nowhere”, she answers, shaking from the cold rain.
SvarSletThe music is loud and makes the whole car vibrate. Payton accelerates and pulls out on the interstate. He keeps going faster and faster, the speedometer hits 80 mph. Payton opens a new beer and takes a sip. Kim looks over at him, with a disapproving look, but he doesn’t see it. She clears her throat and asks him, “Where are you going”? “Nowhere”, Payton answers. “I’m just out for a late night drive”, he says, with a dumb smile.
She begins to regret her decision; maybe it wasn’t so smart getting in the car with this stranger. He keeps accelerating, they’re going about 95 mph now. She’s still shaking, but not from the cold, she is terrified over the fact that this man is driving so fast, one hand on the steering wheel, and a beer in the other.
Payton looks over at the little girl; he thinks about t what the priest had said. Maybe he was right, maybe he should stop at the next rest stop and put her off, and turn himself in. The music is loud, the drums goes right to his head, he is still thinking about turning himself in, but his hand is reaching out for the knife that he has hidden behind her seat. He grabs it, run it slowly up behind her seat. Puts the point of the knife in the back of the seat, right where her heart is. The music overwhelms him, he gets ready to press the knife through the seat, and he feels the adrenaline. The song changes, suddenly it sounds like a horn, he looks up and see headlights coming right towards them. The girl screams, he pulls the steering wheel, and the car goes off the road. If flips a couple of times, and hits a tree, making it slow down from 90 mph to 0 mph in just a second.
Kim wakes up in the hospital, there is a doctor standing next to her. He tells him that her parents are on their way. She smiles, all she could think about in the car, was going home. The doctor says that the man she was driving with didn’t make it. Kim never found out that the car crash saved her life.
Peter